Thursday, October 13, 2011

On Artistry

Creation writhes its forked tongue
Bludgeoning the glass from the sand
Ending promise before awakes the sun
Grains of direction now strewn within this man

Beasts of sacrifice scar the symptoms purse
While leering eyes jeer the cursed eyes
Its scales impress, charring innovation’s curse
As the tidal moons ebb, tainted waves arise

Artistry possesses crux of being
If a muse infects the soul, there is but a single course
Nevermore condemned by visions of mortal seeing
Within his own world, the artist is his only source

Yet, ever shall the sane cross their glance
Isolated in, one’s own love, averted stare
For his salvation, the creator will devour vanity’s dance
Ever knowing, even for the best of them, have inferiority to bear  

 Victoria is hosting meeting the bar tonight over at D'Verse, where the prompt this week is to imitate one of your favorite poets.  I've often tried to do this, especially after those times you go back to their poetic works, as I'm sure many of us do so often, and find yourself becoming entranced upon these poets every word.  Unfortunately though, I've never been pleased with what I've produced in such efforts.  It's always one thing or another, perhaps I feel I've lost my own voice in the process, or, upon reading, find no connection to he/she you were hoping to recreate, mainly though, I believe we hold these favorites of ours to such high standings, that we might feel as if we're disrespecting them.  After all, we love our original work, that's what we live for.  We aren't some band, who may write their own songs, but can always fall back upon laying down cover track after cover track.  In poetry it's, by imitating, we get that incorrect feeling of plagiarism, slowly seeping into our thoughts.  

But this thought process is inhibitive.  Creation makes use of ideas and adds to them.  If we were to simply copy a poem and call it our own, sure there would be a dirty feeling about the air.  But when utilizing these poets to help advance our own craft, there's only benefits to be gained. 

...and even if we don't gain anything from the project at all, there's nothing wrong in paying a bit of homage to those writers of words we love.   

I normally don't take part in meeting the bar, not for any particular reason that I can think of, but I saw this topic and had to at least take a stab at it.  

The piece I wrote I purposely left unidentified, as I'd love to see how close I came after reading the comments.  Thanks again.


  1. I don't find it hard to imitate, I just find I go completely off the rails and do something different, guess my rhyming voice can't be stopped haha

    Really enjoyed the piece, I have no idea what so ever who you used those, copy a movie next time and I'll get it before you can drop a dime..haha

  2. First, great language, I didn’t notice the rhyme until the 2nd time as I was caught up in the meaning, and starting in the 3rd stanza it’s almost as if the artist becomes an ouroboros so I’m intrigued by the ideas you present. Gerhard Richter, a German artist who paints in wildly divergent styles from nonrepresentational to photo-realistic and often obliterates traces of his own ‘style’, sees style as something that is adopted for a particular kind of work. Something, like technique, that can be acquired and used as another tool in the box, discarded when another style would better serve the work. I too have avoided influence and embraced it, tried to piece out what attracts me. In Art and Fear the authors talk about the difference between the experience of art and its creation. We can never reproduce the shock we receive from another’s work. I like how you talk about the creation of it here. Thank you.

  3. My poetry education is woefully lacking - I hope someone identifies the poet who inspired this piece because I love it. I see nothing to change.

  4. Fred, I'm so, so glad you did step up to the bar and did it brilliantly. I can't begin to guess which poet is your source of inspiration. I'm not as well-read as many others in this group. But your ability with meter and rhyme would lead me to guess one of the more classic masters. In any case, there is no hint for me of plagiarism and I think you should just be proud and let your work stand on its own. Bravo, Maestro. I do hope you'll let us know evenually.

  5. nice...devour vanities dance...also really like the creation turning sand into glass...i am ignorant in poetry so i could not tell you where it came from...

  6. First of all, well written, Bravo! Love the artistry theme and the creator devouring vanity's dance is genius.... and true..... Secondly, hard time figuring out who this is emulating..... because of the mortality and physical worldly nature in stanza three I was tempted to think of my favorite poet, of course, Emily Dickinson, but no..... You're using inversely rhyming couplets, popular by early 20th century modernists.. TS Eliot comes immediately to mind. But his was more of a simple, less ornate speech.... so wild guess here: Ezra Pound?

  7. wondering if it's elisabeth bishop's one art you're playing off...very nice fred..enjoyed this...and great seeing you linking up with meeting the bar...

  8. This has so many gorgeous lines! The opening line, in particular, is spectacular.

  9. Pat, I was going to pen the epic Orlin & Drazin go to hell- the original title of the Second Bill & Ted film- but then realized it would be more like a Midnight Run. Thanks, Glad you enjoyed the piece, and we are all glad the rhyme in you will never ride on fumes lol

  10. Anna, great feedback- really appreciate the mention on Richter, I'll be sure to check out his work, alway looking to deepen my artistic soul. I completely agree with all you say here. Really appreciate the feedback, glad you enjoyed the piece

  11. Dee- Thanks glad you enjoyed the piece, I'll mention the poet in a few

    Mama Zen- thanks, glad you enjoyed the piece as well

    Claudia- Nope not Bishop- but flattered to be mentioned next to her, there- Yeah it was my first Meeting the Bar-won't be my last either- thanks again

    John- wow, awesome feedback- I love how you played detective- that's something I normally do to myself as well-always trying to break things down. I really appreciate that-if you're like me you probably go nuts trying to answer a question that you hear. Not any of who you mentioned, but I love Dickinson-who doesn't right? And Eliot has tons of work I absolutely love- never been too into Pound though-but that I have to admit I'm very limited on the reading there- just never got to reading Pound. Think I might have to now. Thanks again, glad you enjoyed the piece

  12. Well, I'm pleased with the response here. Although nobody guessed the poet I used, lots of neat mentions that I'll have to follow up on, and very flattered over the names many thought of.

    Well, who was the poet then?

    I really had trouble deciding which poet to use, I like so many of them. So I started by looking at my favorites:

    Favorite writer of all-time is a pretty close tie between Poe and Kundera- But Not the biggest fan of Poe's poetry- they're good but since we're discussing Poetry and not fiction I couldn't go in that route. Although, Nevermore was a clue I used, as My poet does have a link to Poe.

    So then I went to my favorite poets: The list is pretty long but I was able to cut it down to four: Rilke, Garcia-Lorca, Rimbaud, and Baudelaire

    So I briefly thumbed through each as I tried to make a choice. I was almost forced to jump off-course when I ran across a wonderful poem by Paul Verlaine, that just happened to be stuck on looseleaf in one of my Rilke books. But I chose against emulating You believe in Tea-Leaves and then simply chose against doing another Mythologically infused piece, as I probably would have headed in if I chose Rilke

    So, the next was Flowers of Evil and I never made it to the others work. I refreshed my mind a bit and remembered how much I loved Baudelaire's work. It was pretty easy at that point.

    Anyhow, I tried and glad you all seemed to enjoy it.

    By the way, for those that don't know, Baudelaire translated Poe, and there you have the connection. Thanks again to all, twas fun

    The Poem was supposed to embody the style and a bit of the thematics

  13. don't know fer sure...but...John Milton?

    Creation, here, is Art.
    I like the ''Bludgeoning the glass from the sand'' strong.
    wow. there so much in this poem...packed with motifs.
    I'm impressed.
    good poem thanks for sharing.

  14. hahahaha Orlin and Drazin go to hell, that be great, but yeah it would be more like Midnight Run, LOVE that movie.

  15. Fred,
    Fantastic poetry! And very good rhyme through out. Thanks for visiting


  16. HA- I knew you'd like that one- Midnight Run is a great film- B & T, we'll I'll just say is great only in what they do. Probably the only role, outside of NEO, that I liked Keanu in. And please, don't say "What about Point Break," which so many often do in defense of Keanu. The movie was great, but the acting stunk.

    Yeah you should write a new adventure- Orlin Vs. the minions of the devil and somehow he runs into Drazin bragging how cool he is to the devil himself.- Would be funny indeed

  17. Hank, Cuckooclock- thanks glad you enjoyed the piece, I appreciate the visit, thanks