Shackled!
Breath—impeded.
Motility—a myth.
Tortured by your own
worst warden,
Damning!
Cinquain. 2-4-6-8-2 syllable count
It was all a sham
The song never played
The coupling of palms
never happened
The eyes refused to
meet
She never existed
A palinode is a verse that takes back or retracts something originally said. This is a variation on that. Here, I'm taking a fictitious memory and in what appears to be several moments of reflection, revealing how the previously remembered is understood to be false.
The impossible is
often only improbable,
Improbable lines often
connect in secrecy,
Secrecy is the mark of
lieutenants and vampires,
Vampires are more
afraid of themselves than you are they,
(They) never asked for
such appellations
Anadiplosis is a poetic tool where a line begins with the last word of the previous line. Variations are possible as well, (i.e. ending with an emotion, and beginning with same emotion etc..). Here I used it to create a short verse, where the tool itself is the feature.
Today, heaven lost
friends,
Friends, lost heaven
today
Love, through
ascension; Shrapnel was removed
Removed, was shrapnel;
ascension through love
Antimetabole is a poetic tool where a line is the reversal of the previous line. Here, I simply used two of these, combining the four lines into a short verse of it's own.
Vague stories, imbuing
impossible metamorphoses
I, alone, transcended
eternity’s illumination?
Rhopalic Verse is a tool where each word of a line adds a syllable to the word before. 1-2-3-4-5 is the climbing sequence for each of these lines. Combined together, these two lines create a very short poem.
Head on over to D'verse, where for this week's Poetics, I'm hosting an evening of short verse. The doors open at 3pm. See you there.
Like the explanation of each and yeah we can be our own worst enemy for sure. Short though, pfft the cat has too much to say. haha
ReplyDeleteInteresting forms explored here, Fred. I especially like your palinode which seems very surreal to me (Twilight Zone!) I think I will have to try this form myself. Lots of depth and variety in all of your work today. See you at 3!
ReplyDeletevery cool...the anadiplosis is a cool tool for sure...the antimetabole is cool too...that one is new on me...the thing i really like about whort verse is that it is condensed feeling, emotion, wisdom or even story...and allows room then for the read er to fill the other space...
ReplyDeleteAn interesting array of poetry forms ~
ReplyDeleteI have tried cinquain but have not dipped my hands yet into the other forms ~
See you later ~
oh heck..the second one stings...the song never played...makes me swallow hard.. very cool sampling of short verse here fred..looking forward to poetics later
ReplyDeleteMy goodness, I had no idea there were so many variations on short verse. Thank you for the explanations and examples. I really like the idea of a palinode, will have to try it some time.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the explanations, Fred; there are terms here I've never come across before.
ReplyDeleteloved the prompt - and I agree with Claudia, your second one was stunning! K
ReplyDeleteMy! you've gone to town over this, haven't you? So many facets. I didn't realize form came into these short verses. I shall have to try some more.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Fred.
Thank-you giving me some new tools to work with. I really like the different styles you've used here. You've got my muse on overdrive, I may be writing all night now haha. Your poems themselves were awesome. I like the third one especially
ReplyDeleteI agree with Claudia on the sting of that cinquain
ReplyDeleteWhoops! I mean the palinode
ReplyDeleteYou certainly show how intense short verse can be, and a lot of forms and tools I'd never heard of before.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your fine words and explanations Fred - all are new to me.
ReplyDeleteLove the palinode - something I might play with.
Anna :o]
Very nice variations of short forms, only cinquain I have used before. Great stuff.
ReplyDeleteThanks for this wealth of information, Fred. Have you ever written a palindrome? It's similar to antimetabole.
ReplyDeleteI have worked in palindrome before, actually tried to write an entire poem in one but couldn't hack it and have about two pages of a notebook filled out, was, at one time, amongst many unfinished projects, going to do a dictionary of palindromes, may still finish it too someday. I may be wrong, but I do believe pat came up with one that was pretty long. Lots of fun, and yes, definitely similar to antimetabole.
DeleteReally enjoyed reading these, Fred.
ReplyDeleteThe eyes refused to meet. Yes, a sting, and so well done.
Most illuminating to learn about these forms. Glad that you introduced them. Intrigued by the pallinode :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat. Very informative. The palinode was very cool.
ReplyDeleteantimetabole and rhopalic -- my first time reading these words. I especially like your cinquain. Poof. Like it/she/they never happened. This messes deeply with the psyche. THanks for hosting today, Fred. I always enjoy your prompts.
ReplyDeleteGreat examples! superb job hosting. Love the short forms.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wealth of forms. I m excited to try a few.
ReplyDeleteAwesome demonstration of short forms, Fred. Anadiplosis seems fun to do.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing these.
Wonderful verses and interesting explanatory material. Thanks for the introduction to new forms to be explored.
ReplyDeleteFascinated by the examples, thank you. Gosh, I once wrote (and had published) an anadiplosis without even knowing it had a name, lol.
ReplyDelete...what a variety of treat you have here Fred... so many to explore & learn & must admit some of these i had never encountered yet...though sounds familiar... and thanks for the short discussion you included here also... my favourites are those written after 'anadiplosis' & 'antimetabole'... i might have to try some in the future so i'm saving yours in my pc...if it's ok... great job..smiles...
ReplyDeleteThanks for this educational read Fred. I especially like how you used the Anadiplosis and Antimetabole. Great hosting at the bar too!
ReplyDeleteVery cool, Fred. Thanks for the explanations. Never heard of a lot of these - I'm particularly interested in experimenting with the Anadiplosis and Antimetabole forms. I particularly like your cinquain, and how you use the dashes to create pauses.
ReplyDeleteWow, so much to thank for here. The verses themselves, the notes and the blog list... I am truly grateful and will make good use of. Thanks a billion!
ReplyDeleteGood poems and good information too! Nicely done, Fred!
ReplyDeleteA Palinode! Wow, how fantastic.
ReplyDeleteGreeks took their songs (odes),
and went back again (palin)
over and over
why would that be fantastic?
[I trust the irony is clear]
Wow, Fred, a lot to take in this time; I really need to study all the forms until I know them at the drop of a hat. I'm afraid I wrote what was foremost in my mind and was only able to do a rhyme..the really short verses do require more thought and I had little time..thanks for all the help,,you gave great examples!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for the work you put in to this Pub session. I'm going to have some fun reviewing the details of all these forms. First step will be to learn how to pronounce them.
ReplyDeleteHi Fred - all very interesting, and fun techniques. I found the shrapnel most effective in its very original and powerful twists. Thanks. k.
ReplyDeleteFred ~ great prompt, great post ~ lots more tools for my poetry tookit :)
ReplyDeletefascinating little forms, only the cinquain I'm familiar with--and each nicely turned out to live up to your own idea of maximizing through effective brevity. Really enjoyed this prompt Fred--as with my verbose tendencies, I need lots of poking to get to me to write shorter. Much appreciated.
ReplyDeleteI like all of them, but love the palinode variation. I am going to bookmark this post in my writing file because your explanations and examples are superior. Thank you for a great prompt, Fred.
ReplyDeleteThese are way too cool. Just wonderful. Thanks for introducing us to these forms.
ReplyDeleteThis is very interesting .Thank you. I'm going to save these and give them a shot.Not just a pretty face , Fred!:)
ReplyDeleteHi Fred! I love this post. The only form that I have practiced is the sestina, and I took liberties with that. I won't get the chance to post to Poetics, but I am going to bookmark this and try these forms. Thanks for the excellent challenge :).
ReplyDeleteloved it!! esp with the explns of the poetic forms. I had left my post in the link but it is missing. Guess, my hurried attempt to do so failed me.
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