Where
once walked marsh
For
questing’s grail
Worldly
weights hinged upon-
-Our
unpropitious victory. We could not fail
Complication
unlaced her dress,
Prompting
route to fork its trail
To
the right, a hazed fog split us half,
Spawning
a hash of Dilaudid canaille
To
port, suspicion’s fever flared complicit,
As
rancor stirred in dubiety’s gale
Where
once walked marsh,
Through
vales unkempt
Sifted
sway of silted limb
Marred
by visions dreamt
The
never ceasing eyes of foliage
Pry
through vine and draw contempt
Stanchion’s
fossils ivy-covered,
Memorialize
winnowing’s failed attempt
All
shapes of creatures never seen,
Swarm
the fringes of the verdant kempt
So
close, now to free, yet whispers echo from the brush,
Stating,
“escape you may, but you’ll never be exempt.”
From
what, is all most can muster
But linger long and the thought(s) will show
Where
once walked marsh
Has
since been shadowed by snow
So
many years have now past,
I’ve
forgot how to know
In
a journey of thorns, some prick while others defend
And
for what, a hero’s welcome home?
At
first the honor was the dignity,
The
seduction and the glow
Perhaps
it’s just to make the days gone appear worthwhile,
So near the grail, instead of elation,
concessionary eyes back-roll
Onsets
of the beholden by,
Grandeur’s
chains endured through pride
Footholds
first, is oft it’s last
To
survive the many cracks,
One
must be swift of mind
And
strong with staff
But
even then, the ankles may snap
Insets
appear-thought not of (yet)
(yet),
once renewed is now remanded back
To
hope to hunt for hope
A
plague to the optimist
A
battle scar for most others
Where
once walked marsh infused with hope,
That
path, is found to be, paved by the smoke of ghosts
Where
once walked marsh in boyish tread
Now
stands but one of hundreds dead
Here
left to hold the treasure and bring it home
To
pay homage to the man now seated in the throne
As
memories sort the better part of days
I
often wonder if they think much of those 1000 men
Once
cheered as Gods as they left bay
I
wonder if they think of much, all that was lost by us,
It’s
been so long I doubt they do
But
I’d like to think back and pretend they do to
To
the ships set to sail in the harbor
The
revelry and the returning promises
Seems
like all that’s gets me forward
Is
a pursuit to remember, “whend-we-go”
Claudia is hosting Open Link Night over at D'Verse tonight. The doors open at 3:00pm, and seeing it's a 1/4 past right now, the doors, I would guess to already be open. Check out the OLN, read a ton of amazing poetry. Every week seems to outdo the week before, which is really saying a lot, because the very first week was great. The number of poets submitting their work has dramatically increased, which means more poems to read and more experiences to be had. Anyhow stop on by read some great poems and if you'd like submit one of your own, I'm sure they'd love to have you:)
For my offering this week, nothing experimental as I've been doing the past few weeks, but I'm hoping you'll enjoy it. It's a journey piece, epic poem or whatever moniker you'd like to call it. It's loosely inspired by The Odyssey as well as Norse Myth. Varying from typical myth I thought I'd forego the battle scenes, perhaps allude to them, but make this more of a mental piece, dealing with the emotions of the questers.
"Where once walked marsh", loved the repetition of that line. Loved ""complication unlaced her dress" too--seems that is always the way of things. Lovely read.
ReplyDeleteI hope it's okay that I placed myself in your poem, questing away myself these days. I really enjoyed it, too :)
ReplyDelete..Where once walked marsh....the repetition here works so well..love how you turn the battle scenes from the outward to the inward fred...this piece has great texture and leads us over shaded fields all the way into the harbor..
ReplyDeleteHundreds dead in the marshes made me think of the trenches in WW1 ...how many soldiers lay dead in the after each battle for a few yards more of mud.
ReplyDeleteVery deep, and image filled write!
Wow Fred, what a gripping look at war.
ReplyDeleteThe smoke of ghosts and complication are just a couple of the images that really stand out. Even without the battle scenes, as you mention, the message stands out chillingly clear.
This really was epic, and I enjoyed the journey, with the walking marsh and the questors--the simple couplets at the beginning where really effective--esp liked
ReplyDelete"To the right, a hazed fog split us half,
Spawning a hash of Dilaudid canaille
To port, suspicion’s fever flared complicit,
As rancor stirred in dubiety’s gale."
that was fun unraveling, and so was the rest of the piece. Enjoyed it.
some really great lines in here fred...the complication slipping her dress forking the road, great way to put it...
ReplyDeleteIn a journey of thorns, some prick while others defend
And for what, a hero’s welcome home?
At first the honor was the dignity,
The seduction and the glow
Perhaps it’s just to make the days gone appear worthwhile,
So near the grail, instead of elation, concessionary eyes back-roll
these are haunting thoughts or questions...why
Fred! I love this writing you! Sojourn on, brother...the tale you weave brings forth the great gods to rise and bow before you ;) Thor's hammer bears no weight of judgement here...I LOVED this BUT...I've a bum ankle...prone to snapping, have you ever REALLY heard an ankle snap..still slightly stomach sick over that line! Seriously loved the write...and sincerest apologies for my babble!
ReplyDeleteGlad people enjoyed the piece. Was a bit torn about doing an internal piece. I tend to like incorporating a bit more gore into my mythical jaunts- Tash, yeah my ankle snaps all the time- not like here though- It's weird because it get so tight and then it'll snap-which hurts- but it alleviates the tension- But I guess I'm not really talking about bone snapping- quick note- not sure if everyone knows this or not, but anyhow, when you hear a crack, it's not your bones, it's gas, no pat not that kind, that is built up and the snapping sound is it's release- Anyhow.
ReplyDeleteSorry to those who couldn't leave a comment last night due to a blogger snafu- but I've read it happened at others sites so hopefully it's taken care of- at least I hope- because I must have wrote Google countless times requesting them to fix the updates to feeds- which is to my last check a few months back.
Anyway, I'm privileged to have you all read my work- thanks so much, the feedback is so good:)
Great piece as the cat said on twitter, really epic indeed, had a big long comment but Blogger had a snack, as it went on it's stupid attack.
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