Monday, September 5, 2011

Fear presents itself, when allowed

Tiny tots yet to fret
Dragging tow wood on wheels
Bucket of bottles and cans
Towards the rear of the wagon’s front
Separated by a basketball
Some plastic spills out and over
Into the empty section
And I can’t help but smile
And sigh
For some life’s living while others…

Squirrel runs up barky stairs
Little nut falls
It looks down but dares not follow
In hand I try to return
But a scared look and a scamper is all I find
Toss it as far as I can


  1. How nice throwing the nut away so the squirell can get it with no fear of you. I'm sure the kitties wanted it for a to capture the small moments.

  2. capture a few simple scenes deftly...was just tossing acorns the other day...not sure if the squirrels were happy...they were tossing them down on my car...cute on the kids...

  3. there's some food for thought in this fred...fear can drive us crazy if we allow it in..

  4. Pat, the kitties definitely wanted it for a snack, but they would just bat it around until they got bored with it, unless of course I sprinkled a little nip on it, then they'd play with it until they just loafed about in a stupor. Glad you liked the piece, thanks for the feedback

  5. Brian, thanks, yeah I like tossing things around, acorns are fairly easy to find, but if I'm near water, skipping stones I'll do for sure. Glad you liked this piece, the capturing of each scene was something I was aiming to accomplish with this one, glad you saw it the way you did. Thanks for the feedback

  6. Claudia, thanks for stopping by and for dropping a line, fear can consume us if we let it, that is for sure. Unfortunately though sometimes fear seems to be the only defense mechanism, because once it gets going it can cloud all logic and judgment, thanks again

  7. I think one would toss the acorn not because one still wants the squirrel to have it. Some people would feel disappointed and just throw the acorn far away as what the narrator has done with no thought for squirrel or acorn. "Oh heck, forget it." Or perhaps, "let's just not do this and frighten the animal even more". I don't know how to define it but there is an unpleasant feeling when an animal reacts to me with fear.

    The first stanza seems mild, all is well. The load is not being perfectly transported, things are spilling out but the the children do not seem to mind. The narrator doesn't feel anxious because there is no anxiety in the children (or least none implied). So in reading one does notice the second stanza stands out more because of the presentation of fear.

    Because of these two contrasting reactions of the narrator in the poem, the observations made in this piece are rather interesting to think on, imho.

  8. Raven, sorry for the late reply here. Really glad you enjoyed the piece. I like your interpretation as it plays off the underworkings in the piece. After looking at it again their as this sort of grey area in that second stanza that is really open to interpretation, wish I could say it was intentionally plotted that way, but sometimes fortunes fall unplanned. Personally, as writing I think you're reaction was probably closest to my own. Now though, after a few days I think it's more a disappointment, of the squirrel or himself I can't answer, but probably more like the situation itself. Thanks again, I appreciate the feedback