Molten cracks halo
the residual shadows,
writhing in suffocation,
beneath the tread-marks
of newly balanced souls.
Effigies, beside displaced figurines,
Engulf the enigmatic throb,
Fostered in a day-glow, withering white,
Reincarnate the once procured,
Obsidian oscillation’s whirr, as it sidesteps
Procedure, while imprinting their fractured harbor,
Upon each chamber, along driftwood’s hollow stare
A blistering of countenance-
Divides dissection-
Blinds the reorganized,
Subjugation, brittle to
The veloured angle-face
Of symmetrical sovereignty
A penance bilked in purge
Flitting invocations spur
Satiation’s crypt
A rapidness a-rifling
Into clarifications gaze
To see the instant
Gratified,
Before the nerve
Of sight mislays
Those visions
Bound to fade
Oh so true, no matter who one is and how bright they think their halo shines, there are always cracks and faults, again such wonderful word play, brittle really stuck out, as that's what each choice and the proceeding turn out can be for sure. Oh and speaking of scars and cracks, my leg has one too, as I gave Cassie and Orlin a bath once and Cassie gave me a battle scar as well..haha
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of newly balanced souls
Procedure, while imprinting their fractured harbor,
Upon each chamber, along driftwood’s hollow stare
Before the nerve
Of sight mislays
Those visions
Bound to fade
these were my fav lines in this fred...this goes quite deep..think i need to re-read it once again to really grab it fully..
Pat, that is a great take, almost identical to what idea prompted the poem. The idea was nagging at me, so I wrote that opening stanza and was going to leave it as a stand alone, but after a couple hours the rest of it kind of popped into view and of course I carry a notepad or a recorder with me wherever I go, I was in the car when it came so I had to jot it down right there, and then finished the piece little bit before posting. I just love the wordplay- but I think we all know that:) Thanks again, really glad you enjoy the write
ReplyDeleteClaudia- glad you enjoy the write- There are some really cool lines in here, love when they come to light. It does go a bit deep, and most times I'd say there's so much in a piece I wrote that nobody outside of me could possibly unravel each and every thread, but for this piece it stays pretty focused, on what's done is never gone, always trail you no matter how far removed. First stanza is the strongest and kind of a megaphone for the rest of the poem. The rest kind of diverges in a few paths stemming from it. the ending's a bit more cryptic, so If you do choose to come back and reread, it's that last stanza where I think additional pieces may come best to light. But then again, as I always say, what one gets from a poem, is the true meaning inherent within. Thanks again, really appreciate your feedback:)
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