Thursday, May 26, 2011

With Shields Removed

Don’t turn around,
It won’t consume you when you follow a path
Don’t turn around,
Or face, you will, his unearthly wrath,

I knew too much, too soon,
Age shortened, mind erased,
I knew it all before my time,
Consecrated, desecrated,
I was the only hindrance to his reign,
One born directly akin,
One without ability to sin

I can feel you, and all your minions,
Approaching shadows, crossing in the nights,
I can sense your presence; your foul stench,
Shifting about stealthily; withering, stealing life,
Looking for a time when I’m not near,
Waiting till she’s alone,
Waiting for separation to strike

Don’t turn around,
It can’t devour when the path is clear,
Don’t turn around,
It can’t reach those not consumed by fear,

I can see you walking
A familiar path, a road so well known,
I can feel you talking, each word you speak,
Another moment passes by,
Hang up the phone; hear me call,
Don’t turn around; this is for real,
I can see it closing; another second it does steal,
It’s my fault, its breath you now feel,
I’m much too far, close-yet away,
To protect you now, from an attack that is meant for me,
Just keep moving; I’m almost there,
Don’t turn around; do not veer,
Don’t turn around; please I beg you to hear me please,

Footsteps now covet the sound,
For a pause you stop,
Listening, slightly leaning
Torso, directed to the left,
Shoulder out, hair flies by,
In slow motion, I see the shadow in your eyes,

To my knees I drop,
An agony I was never taught,
Light escaping from each side,
The fluidity rushing from my eyes,

There’s nothing you can do,
No physical infliction upon this frame,
Yet I feel the torture so deep inside,
It came for me,
I tried to save,
It came for me,
It cared not for you,
Just a pawn,
An attempt to harm,
And you would have been fine,
Had you not heard,
The tonality of my tongue,
Calling out, summoning you,
The only reason,
For which you turned around,
And now,


  1. This is beautiful-reminds me of the story of Orpheus

  2. your words act and speak loud and clear,
    love the imagery,
    welcome to poets rally.


    have fun!

  3. That was amazing and heartfelt.

  4. Intriguing. I especially liked the formatting of the poem at the end. The short, one word lines.

  5. Bttrflyscar, interesting take. I wasn't consciously thinking of Orpheus when composing this piece, but being a self-proclaimed mythology buff, there may have been some subconscious underpinnings going on. I can see the comparison at poem's end. Nice insight, and thanks for the response.

  6. Jingle, thanks for your kind words. I'm glad I came across your site and the poet's rally. Along with One Stop they are breath's of fresh air, enabling the widespread sharing poetry is meant for. Thanks for visiting, and thanks for responding

  7. Bluebell books and Grammy, thanks for your kind words, I appreciate the comments and thanks for visiting and taking the time to reply.

  8. brownpapergirl, thanks for the response. I'm glad you enjoyed that little formatting touch I threw in there at the end. I added it like that just shortly before posting the piece. Thought it added a little projection to the piece. Thanks for stopping in and leaving a response.

  9. I could feel the actions and the feelings in depth behind it. Emotive thoughts well-expressed!

  10. Clarice, thanks for your response. I'm glad you were able to feel the piece move. That means so much. Thanks for visiting and taking the time to provide feedback. I appreciate this very much:)

  11. An agony I was never taught,
    nice line...

  12. Blackswan, Thanks for taking the time to visit and respond. I appreciate it very much. I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks again

  13. Powerful words and imagery. The emotion is right there on the surface, beautiful and vulnerable

  14. A very thought-provoking piece.

    Looking forward to seeing more of you in future rallies.

    Nicely done.

  15. Mindlovemisery, Than you for your kind words. I do appreciate them very much. I'm glad you were able to experience it the way you did. Thanks again.

  16. Andy, Thanks for the comment. I appreciate that you took the time to visit and respond. These things mean a lot to me. I also look forward to future rallies and all the lovely work it contains. Thanks again.