Forty-nine feet
Above earth
Beneath cloud
Skeleton sides
Display innards
Empty shell
Thirty-seven yesterdays
And a decade prior from
Fully dressed that day, as it was
Brilliance went unnoticed
As the shuffling soles
Failed to see
A pressure bathing upon thee
A Quarter to the punching hour
Thoughts shifted to those thoughts of home
Nine minutes before the gates would empty
Eleven from the time the bars would close
Clocks stopped their tics
Hands deferred to soft then stopped,
And time grew silent
Sealed
Forever
Undelivered
Would go the message
Of the Cuckoo bird
Wonderful play on time, like how you weave it in and out, different variations of it. All that time and One Flew Over The Cuckoo’s Nest..haha had to use it.
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ReplyDeletethanks for sharing.
Happy Wednesday!
Pat, ha, I missed the comment here. I'll automatically publish then read the comments as I go back through the poems, but missed this. srry. Yeah the cuckoo's nest is a nice touch there, ha Glad you like the time play here, I actually began the piece a different direction, yet had that in mind, so glad it carried over, thanks again
ReplyDeletemorning, thanks for the visit, glad you enjoyed the write. Thanks again, happy wednesday
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ReplyDeletecreative piece of writing..
Cello, thanks for the words of encouragement, glad you enjoyed the piece, thanks:)
ReplyDeleteWell crafted piece. Easy to keep time with. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHere is my second offering for this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/i-am-loved/
Charles, really glad you liked the piece, thanks for stopping in, really appreciate it
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