Pins
tickling
sides
of pores Numbness
stirs anew
Needles
prickling
lengths
of skin
Erratic
tingling
danced askew
across \each synaptic
Black
rise
blue-grey
fall
down
fade
away
Enflamed gaps
inciting fickle flesh
Pulsating
echoes
throb
within/below
Biting
lip,
clutch and grab
An
ache so vast
impossible
to
trace
the lineage back
Pathway
scorned
Which direction
will
this via dolorosa
choose as
her last?
this brought all kind of different pictures to my head...that via dolorosa that jesus had to go, carrying the cross...and those difficult ways each of us has to go at times..felt..
ReplyDeletehuh intersting...christ walk or a difficult way...i looked it up and sometimes it is hard to tell which route it will take...i like the scattered form too as it plays off of it...and the prickles along the skin a nice touch...
ReplyDeleteWow, this is cool!
ReplyDeleteLOL get drunk on verse, hmmm is that possible? Never tried that. I hate when those feelings arise in ones body, that damn pins and needles crap, try a pinched nerve in the neck, leaves you in a wreck. Least that is where my mind went as that is the most annoying thing ever.
ReplyDeletehey fred,
ReplyDeletelike watching a V.cool tennis match - dynamics working and playing off one another - building momentum - some net calls, twitch the rally but it maintains pace and ultimately... you SMASH IT! :D
great to read you on time this week fred!
i felt like Norm last week... Cliffless! :D
now i see...you are going in all these directions, only to ask which direction...LOL!!!
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Love the set up of the piece Fred...kept me on my toes...as always, you write with such a natural rhythm, the read is fantastic! The Way of Suffering may offer us all a different destination, but no matter which ancient pathway is chosen, I feel we all share MANY of the same trials and tribulations. ANOTHER one to get my mind racing...this has been a hell of an OpenLinkNight!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting structure love! I like your work a lot! Holds the intrigue throughout...and the last stanza works well with repeating the form :)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant piece!
xoxo
Missed you last week, but this more than makes up for it. The stair step progression and staccato stanzas work perfectly to move the poem step by step, and all the assonance and -ing words are like an echo of sensation till your skin really does start to prickle. Fine poem, Fred.
ReplyDeleteThe structure is awesome, the subject engaging, and the voice uniquely yours. Wonderful work as always Fred.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favorites of yours, Fred. The separation of the lines and words and their inter-relation but dissonance is very striking. Great job. k.
ReplyDeleteTrying to feel the poem's described sensations on skin -- it feels like urges within pulling one this way and that. Sometimes the struggles in the mind does manifest into physical sensations. Pin pricks, tinkling, discomfort, aches from the weight of choices or the situation, the person is undecided.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting piece to read and feel.