You
don’t get it
you
can’t understand
and
yet for my sake
you
always say that you can,
you say you do
but I know that's for me
And
for this
I’ll always pray
that you'll never see
Loving stares
can reveal so much more
than
a thousand words
anesthetically poured
Loving stares
I’ve
never cared
no not before
It’s
a shame
but it's a pity more,
what is, is
in the past, it’s a-gone
and it ain't coming back
times change and so do we
always wrestling with the troubles
of trying to get free
and we often say those things
that we don't mean
hoping, praying, it was only a dream
And I feel blessed
to have had you there
I feel blessed
to have someone that cares
forever near
Beautiful, emotive, and inspiring; we are definitely being spoiled with these recordings.
ReplyDeleteThanks Anna, Spoiled might be the key word for my singing, but I do appreciate that you enjoyed it.
DeleteThis is a very successful blend of poetry and song - it reads well, but listening to you sing-and-say the words, adds a different dimension to the mood.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry, glad you enjoyed the piece. I write songs all the time, and just up until recently I didn't know how to post audio, now I do, I've been doing much more of it. Thanks again.
DeleteI thought it sounded like a song too. Ain't love grand :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. Yep it can be grand. Glad you enjoyed the tune.
DeleteSuch a lovely poem song...a different and soft side of you, I like it. But sorry I can't sing as my voice is only good for the shower. Ha..ha...
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this at RT ~
Thank you. Really glad you enjoyed it. Yeah, there are many sides to me…lol Yeah, well, many people have told me my voice isn't the greatest too. But that's kind of why you won't hear the high pitched stuff from me, definitely know my limitations lol Yeah, I've been really enjoying the RT pages, been reading them for a while but just really started the past month or so contributing a piece here or there. Definitely a very good site.
DeleteThe song of love floats off like a dove. Going all lovey dovey on us now? First talking to yourself and not this? Geez are you in some sort of bliss?..lol...the cat can't carry a tune in a bucket, so no help there, but of course I have other ways at my lair.
ReplyDeletehey, yeah, lovey dovey just appeared. haha as did the letter, I can't control what my mind thinks up, otherwise it would all be dragons, warriors and stuff like that, perhaps a super-hero or two, but I think you've got that cornered at your zoo, with my buddy tarsier and his buggy eyes. Hey, don't sell yourself short, I like the theme songs you do. Thanks
DeleteI loved it and as I was reading I was like this is a song...its as relatable as anything gets..we all been there, in both places and the ending is put exactly as it should be...great job.
ReplyDeleteThanks, glad you enjoyed it, I love writing songs.
DeleteI love that it turned into a song!...and that you sung it for us! :)
ReplyDeletethanks Betsy, I appreciate that.
DeleteFred- This is a great poem/song. I especially like the repitition of this such powerful stanza-
ReplyDeleteLoving stares
can reveal so much more
than a thousand words
anesthetically poured
def lyrical man....and i really love the chorus in this...you def tap a familiar place in it as well...
ReplyDeleteDef lyrical in its disposal .. kewl
ReplyDeleteYes, has wistful lyricism of song. In some ways, it's like two songs. (I think this happens when you write poems that become songs, as because you are writing it down, there's a reluctance to be as repetitive as in a song.) But you might consider doing it - really having the refrain repeat more. It may mean separating out some of the verses or putting in another song - because I think your Loving stares stanza is your refrain. k.
ReplyDeleteReally nice, Fred. I like the way you sing it too Those beautiful lyrics will definitely stick in the head. :)
ReplyDeletegreat piece of poetry. reminds me of someone i know...
ReplyDeleteWhat a sweet expression! It sounds like it should be a song... is it? If so I love the chorus. And you're right; a look can be so much more powerful than a thousand words sometimes. That being said, your words here are powerful, and I can't even see you, haha!
ReplyDeleteThis is powerful stuff:
ReplyDelete"Loving stares
can reveal so much more
than a thousand words
anesthetically poured"
Well done. I could definitely see this as a song. Excellent work.
okay, so i can't listen right now but i just love these lines. they speak to a bond that knows it can't be everything for the other, but is, anyway. i love it, so plainly expressed. thank you for this! and i'll come back to listen :)
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