I’m
hoping to get to where
I
have to be—without using
crescendo’s
descriptive
property
The
smells of traveling folk
irradiate
definition
procure
inhibitory realms
and
guide the soul to
where,
all’s cast unto pools
of
a tolerant breed
Mystics,
madmen, gypsy, seers of
romani
lore, clashing western
culture
with their crystalline torrents
of
adrenalin
Pulsing…
Eddy’s,
whirlwinds, the vortex
and
a single parasol—
swirling with purposeful nonchalance,
through
each element near and far,
stealing
pieces imprisoned in, every rotation
another
sensation floods your face, past the eyes,
through
internal trellises, residing
into
crescent shells, of a
Once
magnifying moment
in
unbridled pleasantry…
Sounds…depress
the catalytic
for
they can listen but not revel
in
the auditory repetitions, left to
Taste,
funnel cakes and honey-sex
on
display, waiting for your foreign
Caress,
unto this sport of touch that will never tell
of
Ticket
stubs—torn—
turnstiles,
in need
Of
lubrication—
still
frozen since 1969
For Poetics this week over at D'Verse, the uber-creative Claudia Schoenfeld is hosting, and presents us with the challenge of composing a piece surrounding Fun Fairs, or how they say it where she's from, Jahrmarkt, which has such a better ring, and lets face it, is such a cooler word than Fair, Fun Fair, or even Carnival. So head on over, take everything in, and dream back upon your own experiences and memories, and compose a Jahrmarkt poem of your own. But, please, make sure you link it up, so we can all live vicariously through your words.
Wow, this was deep. I listened as I read too which made it even better. I remember the fortune tellers there too, never had mine told at a fair though.
ReplyDeleteNice write Fred~!
there is a little extra spice in your fair there...haha...there is something a bit sexy about the fair...a little magic in the air...and soft saw dust by the tents you know...all those lights and energy...grins...but since 1969 that might take a bit of lube you know...lol...you caught a bit of the atmosphere in your poetic bottle brother..
ReplyDeleteI like the images of your Jahrnakt swirling in a single parasol but ending with torn ticket stubs ~ Great writing Fred ~
ReplyDeleteWow, Fred, I enjoyed this. Especially listening to you read. Right now I am thinking about the joy of funnel cakes....and yes, the smells of traveling folk are, yes, distinctive. Enjoyed your write.
ReplyDeleteEddy’s, whirlwinds, the vortex
ReplyDeleteand a single parasol—
swirling with purposeful nonchalance,
Great writing Fred!
This is great, Fred... with the spins, the sights and sounds, the smells... very sensuous. Amazing ending, too.
ReplyDeleteI really like the opening and closing stanzas--they're packed with nuance and with ideas--the center seems more imagistic and shifting, and makes an excellent contrast that is all sort of like going to, arriving at and partaking, then leaving the Fair behind. Nice one, Fred.
ReplyDeleteYou really brought the place to life with the atompshere you set and that is surely a safe bet. As the smells came alive and some other things of such a dive, as 1969 might need a bit of adjusting to work what so ever, maybe just the pull of a lever.
ReplyDeletethis is very beautiful poetry
ReplyDelete"Caress, unto this sport of touch" could be a poem unto itself as a theme, i realize it's an enjambment, but it works in so many ways
Ha. I second Brian's comment.
ReplyDeleteI love that first stanza, and this: "Taste, funnel cakes and honey-sex on display, waiting for your foreign Caress"
smiling at the honey-sex... there's something sexy about that fun fairs in a weird way..i have often thought that and you brought it alive beautifully..all the scents, the crackling in the air...very cool take on the prompt fred
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful stuff that improves with re-reading ... love the closing stanza
ReplyDeleteThe smells of traveling folk
ReplyDeleteirradiate definition .. love that... this is a take on the Poetics theme only you could have written... excellent, cheers
Nice to hear a performance - the proper place for poetry
ReplyDeleteA really wonderful one - I especially like the last couple of stanzas. Wonderfully vivid and original - just terrific. k.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your perspective, as I read it, from the point of view of a carnie. In the community where I spend winter, there's a very senior citizen who recently published a memoir of his years growing up a carnie. It's title (believe it or now) Carnie!
ReplyDeleteI'm with Audrey,
ReplyDeleteI loved the big picture essence you captured, and with with still moments, the parasol - the ticket stubs.
Excellent!
Like how the atmosphere built in the central stanza and the picture you created around the parasol line. Quite brilliant and very pleasurable to read. Pam
ReplyDeleteWhat a vivid use of language. Nice job!
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