Viewings
of
imbalance and
proportional
depth
clutter
first
then
clot in
permanence
Space,
tiny dots,
codes,
freckles,
pips
turnstile
a-round
into
void
less
optical
incoherencies
Eversion
shifts
ballast
two
instable
weights
form….
Like the rhyme and flow as away you go. Also the way you weave and distort a shape with the verse was great. Shifting and forming much like life and all the surrounds.
ReplyDeleteha...cool flow to this...and i like...could not tell you what is means completely
ReplyDeletethe turnstyles around line is really cool...
and AVENGERS rocked my face off...it was good man...
I like the visuals in this poem, Fred.
ReplyDeleteI was puzzled, yet fascinated by your verse.
ReplyDeleteI kinda imagine images being broken into little dots and then simply dissipated into the black space. Wonder what happens after the last line, do they all collapse into a point or forever spread out, like our physical universe.
ReplyDeleteThe opening was strongest for me-- the clutter and clots of imbalance something I can very much relate to. K.
ReplyDeletethis reminds me of the sky somehow...or was that a subliminal effect from your background? ha.
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