The Other Side of Poetry
Like the rhyme and flow as away you go. Also the way you weave and distort a shape with the verse was great. Shifting and forming much like life and all the surrounds.
ha...cool flow to this...and i like...could not tell you what is means completelythe turnstyles around line is really cool...and AVENGERS rocked my face off...it was good man...
I like the visuals in this poem, Fred.
I was puzzled, yet fascinated by your verse.
I kinda imagine images being broken into little dots and then simply dissipated into the black space. Wonder what happens after the last line, do they all collapse into a point or forever spread out, like our physical universe.
The opening was strongest for me-- the clutter and clots of imbalance something I can very much relate to. K.
this reminds me of the sky somehow...or was that a subliminal effect from your background? ha.