Thursday, February 16, 2012

Properties of Being/ A Swallowing Force


I.
Calcium,
Phosphorus,
Sodium,
Collagen, et al…

Three hundred and fifty,
more or less,
internal/external
complexities fuse; connect
   to form the shell

neural pathways spark
firing in rhythmic frustration

There is more; there is much more,
all of which can be explained,
rearranged and explained again

But there is always a question to explore,
what’s & how’s flood the premise, and
most probably will, for forever more.

II.

a mass of
this element or that
irresistible force,
impossible To outlast
repetitive and automatic,
circumstantially unknown
the spiral column embraces visibility
process of removal by aspiration, by force
an action, a condition, an unfortunate attraction,
attracting all items within its force-filled path,
 by a differential in pressure, bringing towards,
around and around and around, spinning
water, fire and/or wind
whirling…Whirling…
forcefully whirling
Vortex, eddy, tourbillion
ravaging, ravaging
impossible
to avoid
Maelstroms’
agitated, ever-agitated
all consuming
whirlwind

6 comments:

  1. very nice... love that you shaped part two like a vortex....and it kinda sucks you into the wordstream...reads faster and faster... this is very cool fred....There is more; there is much more,....and always questions...and never enough answers it seems..

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  2. A whirling dance of words. Love the shape of the second part. Much like a tornado would look like. Very deep and so many wonderful lines but this: 'attracting all items within its force-filled path' stayed with me.

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  3. def a nice rip fred...nice concrete effect as well...i see the shell...def nice on the pacing...claudia nailed some of my fav parts to the wall already...

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  4. We could explore fifty live times and still be right back where we started and finally be a bit more light hearted. Knowing in the vastness of this and that and everything else out and about. We will never know everything so why pout? Agitation is a pain though, especially if it's a person doing it to you, but that you know..haha

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  5. Nice pacing of your words...I felt I was in that vortex spinning

    These are my fav lines:

    But there is always a question to explore,
    what’s & how’s flood the premise, and
    most probably will, for forever more.

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  6. Like Claudia said, the second part really pulls you in with its sensation of motion. Really cool, Fred!

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