…and
the aroma dangles in the air
Slowly
sifting attention away
From
all that is and will surely be to come
Armbands
are snipped, calling forth the next in line
Slowly
sifting attention away
From
the Fibonacci sequencing at hand
Armbands
are snipped, calling forth the next in line
Collapsing,
when confronted by the red ghost behind the door
From
the Fibonacci sequencing at hand
Perils
form in the mixed metaphors that are tears
Collapsing,
when confronted by the red ghost behind the door
Etching
rivers unto thighs—for fear’s signature cannot be forged
Perils
form in the mixed metaphors that are tears
Rancor
amongst pretentious veils, falsely uncovering discoveries felt
Etching
rivers unto thighs-for fear’s signature cannot be forged
Ominously
carving variety unto allele’s unseen
Rancor
amongst pretentious veils, falsely uncovering discoveries felt
In
the name of Science, detestable explorations commence
Ominously
carving variety unto allele’s unseen
Under
the direction of men who truly believe themselves Gods
In
the name of Science, detestable explorations commence
From
all that is and will surely be to come
Under
the direction of men who truly believe themselves Gods,
…and
the aroma dangles in the air
For Sam Peralta's Form-For-All Pantoum prompt over at D'Verse. Stop on over to D'Verse and make sure you read Sam's excellent write up regarding this form. It's one of my favorite forms and I think you'll find it both challenging and exhilarating to compose. Check out what the poets have created in their Pantoums and while at D'Verse, think about creating and sharing a Pantoum of your own, as there's still time to get your poem linked up with the others. Cheers
For Sam Peralta's Form-For-All Pantoum prompt over at D'Verse. Stop on over to D'Verse and make sure you read Sam's excellent write up regarding this form. It's one of my favorite forms and I think you'll find it both challenging and exhilarating to compose. Check out what the poets have created in their Pantoums and while at D'Verse, think about creating and sharing a Pantoum of your own, as there's still time to get your poem linked up with the others. Cheers
heck...there are too many men who truly believe themselves Gods... not familiar with these two guys but think i don't wanna get familiar with them..ha...tight write fred and great work on the form
ReplyDeleteoh some great word choice here...rancor is a cool word...the etching rivers unto thighs...some scary themes...some things we should not mess with you know...i love starting with an elipse as well denoting something before...
ReplyDeleteAhh, what a topic! The form allows you to drill in your outrage on top of crystal images of the outrage's cause. Powerful story leading to poowerful end, here to the bad bad smell.
ReplyDelete"Rancor amongst pretentious veils, falsely uncovering discoveries felt
In the name of Science, detestable explorations commence
Ominously carving variety unto allele’s unseen
Under the direction of men who truly believe themselves Gods"
Yeah men believe themselves to be gods or at least able to do things above all because they want to leave a mark or are destined or some crap. Many even buy into their little made up world too, oh so sad.
ReplyDeleteSocial commentary in a pantoum! Besides the exploration of powerful phrasing, I appreciate the way you slowly build the line-lengths of the refrains as you progress through the pantoum. This excellent device allows you to build a more and more powerful voice with each strident refrain.
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