Days,
A
|
I
B
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Hold
C
|
Afar
D
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Tonight
E
|
Strays,
A
|
Watched
F
|
Cold
C
|
From
G
|
Sight
E
|
Stealing
H
|
Life,
I
|
Embalming
J
|
Room—
K
|
Ever
L
|
Reeling—
H
|
Seemed
M
|
Calming—
J
|
Simple,
N
|
Clever,
L
|
Binding
O
|
Her
P
|
Remnants
Q
|
So
R
|
Weak
S
|
Finding
O
|
Lit
T
|
Commandments
Q
|
Upon
U
|
Doublespeak
S
|
Starred
V
|
Eyes
W
|
Guide
X
|
Her
Y
|
Cause
Z
|
Guarded
V
|
With
AA
|
Pride
X
|
Then
AB
|
Pause
Z
|
And
AC
|
She
AD
|
Said
AE
|
Each
AF
|
Sign
AG
|
Firsthand,
AC
|
As
AH
|
Unfed
AE
|
Loneliness
AI
|
Aligned
AG
|
CODED MESSAGE
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B
I
AH
As
|
F
Watched
AD
She
|
P
Her
T
Lit
|
G
From
AF
Each
|
D
Afar
K
Room
|
I
Life
AA
With
|
M
Seemed
W
Eyes
|
R
So
U
Upon
|
N
Simple
Y
Her
|
AB
Then,
AI
Loneliness
|
Days,
I hold afar tonight
strays,
watched cold from sight
Stealing
life, embalming room—ever
reeling—seemed
calming—simple, clever,
Binding her remnants so weak,
finding
lit commandments upon doublespeak,
Starred
eyes guide her cause,
guarded
with pride then pause,
And
she said each sign
firsthand,
as unfed loneliness aligned
Deciphered verse:
I
watched her from afar
as
she lit each room
Life
seemed so simple then,
with
eyes upon her loneliness
Ok, so I thought I did something a bit different a few weeks back, but lost my notes as to what the directions were, confused myself a bit, so held off on posting. Found them today, so decided to post it.
The poem utilizes a mathematical, cipher type approach for building a poem. In the large grid, you'll notice each box has a rhyme scheme listed, which indicates where rhymes occur and so forth.
Their are two poems created here, but, to be fair, you kind of have to keep the hidden poem in mind while creating the original one.
The original poem will be entered into the spaces in the grid, making sure the rhyme schemes fit. Then, the columns that do not rhyme are extracted, and thus, become a poem of their own.
Hopefully this explanation, and the poem itself, in grid and then broken down to how both original and hidden poem look taken out of the grid are adequate enough to understanding how this puzzle type of poem works.
holy crap dude...how does your mind work...fascinating ...
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing, Fred. It requires certain awareness on the words and rhymes to extract/decipher the hidden poem.
ReplyDeleteAlways good at math so I think I got the jest of it with ease, again an interesting way to approach a verse, always coming up with nifty ideas at your sea. The gradual beating down to the last act was great.
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ReplyDeletecool - I love these types of exercises. Have you ever tried a squared stanza? let me know if you do. I'm going to try this one today! thanks!
ReplyDeleteI think I did it, Fred. Let me know if you have a minute. thanks!
ReplyDeleteI loved your use of the form, even a better example than my own. Really an amazing job. As for the squared stanza, yes I do believe I have done those before. I believe, D'verse had one for a form for all a little while back, those are both fun and challenging as well. Thanks again, really glad you enjoyed the form.
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