Starcrusher
Stands
Alone
with
coins of gold
prohibiting
ocularity
a silent shroud
a table-filled feast
where hands are chained
where feet are chained
and toothpicks pry
open the lids
so
starcrusher
can see
everything
he can't
everything
you wish you wouldn't
a feast without recourse
Silence of the stars
clash
as petrified gullets
gnash teeth
improbably
Over at D'verse Stu is asking us to get in touch with our nightmares in his Nighmarish verse prompt. Head on over there and check out some great poetry.
Letting everything hang loose for all the see does not cause glee. As many a nightmare of such a thing has taen place in real life or in the mind. But then a sort of clarity comes with it too at times, so I suppose even the worst nightmare can have some sort of point to it.
ReplyDeleteOuch, those toothpicks a vile torture in an evocative piece of writing.
ReplyDeletewow...very nightmarish indeed....esp. the part with the toothpicks is scary...
ReplyDeletegave me shivers fred..the seeing everything you wish you wouldn't..
That last stanza really seals it. Scary!
ReplyDeleteTorturous!
ReplyDeletehands and feet bound at a feast...thats no fun...smiles...and the toothpicked eyes make mine sting just a bit as well...there are some things i def dont want to see...
ReplyDeleteThis almost had a fantasy feel feel about it Starcrusher sounds like a very powerful character indeed....shackling hands and feet to tables, feasting, gnashing teeth- his was certainly hell like, but not in a traditional 'Beelzebub' kind of way- it interesting that your subconscious had put this slant on it- twisted it into something similar, but also quite different. Agree with with mama zen- last stanza was killer
ReplyDeleteThat last image is so scary....I like the terse yet vivid images here ~ Great job of spooking us Fred ~
ReplyDeleteI gotta agree, the toothpicks creeped me out just a bit. Very disturbing poem...in the best way possible.
ReplyDeleteForced to sit and see and yet bounded and unable to act or run away. Utter despair.
ReplyDeletei like starcrusher, especially twice, and silence of the stars a lot.
ReplyDeleteA feast that you can neither touch nor taste, food that endlessly assaults the senses but can never satisfy the hunger, being forced to see so much plenty but never to enjoy it - this truly is the stuff of nightmares.
ReplyDeletefeast without recourse? is that a pun?
ReplyDeletesemantic feeling
Haha, no not a pun, but it certainly can work that way. The jokes on the character here, all that food and he can't eat any of it, but is forced to stare it down.
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