Tuesday, December 18, 2012

The Rhythm in Sequence

I cannot determine mischief’s cause

1,2,3  you sparkled pheromones
1,4     and illustrious
1,3     prisms, glistening
1,2     bright besides

1      {Fear}
1       Is
1,2    what destroys
1,3    me, vacating
1,4    all positioning,
1,2,3  each caress deviates
1,2,4  the fragment’s dismemberment
1,2,5  haunts freely, sensitivity
1,2,4  is tortured forevermore

I thought I'd play around with Fibonacci sequencing a little bit. Whereas normal Fibonacci poems work vertically, 1, 2, 3 etc.. i thought I'd work through the sequencing per line, yet then, there is also a method mathematically to the way I've ordered the sequencing vertically as well.   I'm not going to tell though, see who can figure it out, but a clue, is that it has, in part, something to do with alternating rhythms.  The numbers are corresponding syllabic count for the respective words in each line.   And oh, there are actually two separate poems posted here, but I like the way they play off one another, therefore I thought I'd post them together. Just something a bit different.

Stop on over to D'Verse where OLN gets going later on today.  The doors open up at 3pm and the poetry is flowing freely all night long.  Stop by and read to your heart's content and while you're there, how about sharing a poem you wrote for other's to enjoy as well.  See you there. 


  1. Alas, D'Verse maybe too late for me today, but if the opportunity presents itself I shall be there!

    Interesting what you've done here.

  2. that is rather fascinating....took me a second to figure out what you were doing with the numbers but that is rather brilliant..fear is what destroys us

  3. You worked the fibonacci form well, Fred, as you created a rather dark scene of caress....

  4. Interesting indeed, with the numbers at your feed. Going all fibonacci and giving me math, in your number bath. Like the flow too, but you can keep the torture at your zoo haha

  5. a poetry riddle...can't believe it...ha..i like how inventive you are...have never heard about Fibonacci poems before...fun...

  6. ...both interesting and confusing.... but i'm curious to know it more...hmmmn...

  7. I love "different".

    The "Fib", as it is affectionately known, is a modern experimental form. I love how forms constrain -- or offer constraint to be played with.
    Fibonacci's sequence is {1,1,2,3,5,8 ...} where each subsequent term is the sum of the previous two.

    I don't see Fibonocci's sequence here at all, but I do see a pattern in your first poem of decreasing syllables by 1 per line. But I can't see a pattern in your second except it increases except for the last line.

    Hope you tell us what your method was.

    BTW: possible edit: "for the respectIVE words in each line"

    1. Yeah, no, you're right as far as the technical Fib goes, but you can also use variations of the form, which is one reason i like it. You don't have to cycle straight through, but you certainly can. This is why this one is different. I wanted to create a pacing structure a la the fib, and from there I'd play around with variations throughout, in order to keep the rhythm I was shooting for. The riddle is in the fib itself. You noticed that the lines aren't traditional, which is part of it. but:

      quickly, for example: 1,2,3 which is fib in 1 +2=3
      next line I play a little here. Carry over 3 +1 =4

      Now the real fun starts: Next line could be 4=3 + 1 or 4-1=3

      Bottom poem is actually a different piece I included as it played with sequencing but also fit the theme of the words here. in the bottom poem, you have a descending sequence: 1 (fear) equates to 0, as when in fear you are either sensorily overloaded or numb, I've found, numbness, frozen to be more typically representational of fear, so I use a nil set for fear. Then 1 begins yet, seeing all lines contain a single 1 entry, I lock it and don't use in formula. leaving 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 6--the descending from 7 shifts the pattern as suggested subtly by the direction of Deviates in the five line.

      Main thing is the second poem was a piece I wrote utilizing mathematic variabilities, I do a lot of these math-based pieces, just normally they don't get posted. The fib itself, my variation upon it, is the initial piece here. The riddle of sorts was what I included up top. the second portion, I knew it would be shocking if anyone picked up on the intricacies of the nil sets and the deviation, but I saw it fit well enough to include in a fib sequence, using the 2, 3, 4 so forth measurements, which of course only works once you lock the 1's.

      Yeah, the -ive was a typo. Thanks

  8. How fun Fred. It seems you had a good time playing around with this. I like the words, but the riddle is beyond me. This is really cool.

  9. I am terrible at math stuff so not sure that I got the riddle but I did enjoy what I read. Sheila

  10. I love the Fibonacci form. You tackle it well.

  11. I'm math-challenged, but enjoyed this a lot, Fred, both for the meaning and the skill you show in playing with the form.

  12. I wish I knew what the heck you were writing about, but I don't. And thus I am compelled to learn it. Fibonacci....

    Thanks for making me think!

  13. I too have never heard of Fibonacci poems before.

    Whatever its form - your words (and different poems) work beautifully.

    Anna :o]