tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post5306862413286367129..comments2023-08-29T00:19:57.259-04:00Comments on Poetical Psyche: The Missing Thirteen-Twenty-FiveAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-1530138027590083592012-12-09T14:15:15.976-05:002012-12-09T14:15:15.976-05:00Such a compelling write, Fred. Great plot, charact...Such a compelling write, Fred. Great plot, character development, tension created by attention to detail. Just superb.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-71592404569987722172012-12-09T11:14:35.160-05:002012-12-09T11:14:35.160-05:00Oh my goodness! The tension in this piece is so th...Oh my goodness! The tension in this piece is so thick, the writing so taut, and the ending is just ... not sure I have a word for that. Thanks for sharing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-26869968463486658482012-12-09T07:03:06.842-05:002012-12-09T07:03:06.842-05:00Yikes! Really, you have a mini-screen play here, ...Yikes! Really, you have a mini-screen play here, although like the scree play of a bad dream. For me, it works terrifically well on that level, perhaps because of the flow of consciousness in and out, and some of the action has a dreamlike quality. k. <br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-41696027769527856722012-12-09T05:48:44.811-05:002012-12-09T05:48:44.811-05:00Thanks - you've shown me very clearly what I w...Thanks - you've shown me very clearly what I was supposed to do! Fantastic response to the prompt.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-51297670591898778922012-12-09T03:53:56.798-05:002012-12-09T03:53:56.798-05:00He should never have put his feet in that house in...He should never have put his feet in that house in the first place.Vacciniushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03631121664181976045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-57635714147139502552012-12-08T22:56:12.131-05:002012-12-08T22:56:12.131-05:00..action-packed and thrilling... no denial of your.....action-packed and thrilling... no denial of your skill as a screenwriter(i read 'bout it on your profile)... and though your chosen subject is no longer uncommon, what made this piece stood out was the fact that there were no dull moments...all scenes were substantial & very essential in achieving the work's full potential... i just find it better in prose than poetic maybe because of the incorporation of dialogues among the playing characters... but nonetheless, a seriously well-inspired write & you do take us on a ride... adorable... smiles...kelvin s.m.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02591849636814413110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-69695203771920698092012-12-08T20:03:33.777-05:002012-12-08T20:03:33.777-05:00Vivid and action-packed... this kept me on the edg...Vivid and action-packed... this kept me on the edge of my seat, Fred.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-80143760635364071112012-12-08T19:43:17.747-05:002012-12-08T19:43:17.747-05:00What can I say, the internal dialogue with the cha...What can I say, the internal dialogue with the characters, the drama, the killing and emotional close at the end...heavy and terrific writing here. I can now appreciate how skillfully you created play and stage for drama ~ Superb story telling ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-19299286854459490062012-12-08T17:48:31.628-05:002012-12-08T17:48:31.628-05:00I.Love.This. You have a knack for the inner/outer...I.Love.This. You have a knack for the inner/outer, for the action, for the ways people double back on themselves.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-29249278797095472882012-12-08T17:46:49.947-05:002012-12-08T17:46:49.947-05:00Wow...amazing tension and conflict building right ...Wow...amazing tension and conflict building right to the end. You hooked me so completely I had to read it again and study how you did it.author.nara.malonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07159847596372441526noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-42394357281837848532012-12-08T17:01:21.434-05:002012-12-08T17:01:21.434-05:00Phew.. Talk about a desperate situation. One wants...Phew.. Talk about a desperate situation. One wants (or, seems to enjoy violence) and the other got in too deep to get out... good grief. The tension in this was so real. How sad, because it's all so believable, more so these days too. <br />Fabulous write Fred. Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-55784805987531932692012-12-08T16:38:30.621-05:002012-12-08T16:38:30.621-05:00Brilliantly entwined i loved this a lotBrilliantly entwined i loved this a lotChris Lawrencehttp://velvetmedia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-8825802594938491782012-12-08T16:16:17.968-05:002012-12-08T16:16:17.968-05:00Fred...I loved your prompt...debated going video o...Fred...I loved your prompt...debated going video on you...really get into a scene flow...but totally chickened out...you ALMOST made me do it ;) Now...reading this, I may work up the nerve yet. Fantastic talent as always, but truly enjoy seeing this side of your pen...Tashtoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15847190224960829574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-38057851442467612352012-12-08T16:00:41.056-05:002012-12-08T16:00:41.056-05:00Terrific bit of writing here, Fred! Intense stuff!...Terrific bit of writing here, Fred! Intense stuff!Marbles in My Pockethttp://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/12/08/the-second-time/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-67146702014853506202012-12-08T15:35:54.251-05:002012-12-08T15:35:54.251-05:00An amazing write, Fred. You have done well combin...An amazing write, Fred. You have done well combining acting and poetry. Really an interesting concept. I enjoyed your characters....and your tale! Excellent prompt, Fred. Such a lot of information presented...whew.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-85392799743221834252012-12-08T15:24:22.101-05:002012-12-08T15:24:22.101-05:00Turbo-charged Intensity! Thanks.Turbo-charged Intensity! Thanks.Candi Morrowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00273871239412618734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-81904405219572412362012-12-08T15:24:16.443-05:002012-12-08T15:24:16.443-05:00Wow, quite intense and I loved it. Wow, quite intense and I loved it. Susan Danielshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13241514922366571247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-78560802021429953822012-12-08T15:22:33.548-05:002012-12-08T15:22:33.548-05:00Yes, to think they weren't even in their own h...Yes, to think they weren't even in their own house. Very dramatic, and you put us right in the thick of things, but that's the advantage of first person narrative... whoa!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-11590150195695937892012-12-08T15:21:09.846-05:002012-12-08T15:21:09.846-05:00Wow you just hit the gas and kept going at it, rus...Wow you just hit the gas and kept going at it, rush rush rush, forgetting what could matter as all one wants as a wallet to get fatter. Great write.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-89725059664853766792012-12-08T15:19:17.618-05:002012-12-08T15:19:17.618-05:00oh heck fred...what a write...love how you let the...oh heck fred...what a write...love how you let the different voices flow together, and not only the spoken words but also the things he thinks and the narrator's voice...so well done..wowClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-73796921693912307422012-12-08T14:56:13.049-05:002012-12-08T14:56:13.049-05:00holy cow dude...wow....intense scene...hope i dont...holy cow dude...wow....intense scene...hope i dont ever need the money that bad and it just got worse when the fam walked in...ugh...wonder what they will think when they show up at that crime scene...all the bodies....interesting the flow of blood too, the river styx...nice hit...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com