tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post6860932963376368112..comments2023-08-29T00:19:57.259-04:00Comments on Poetical Psyche: TimingAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-43195734046094310602013-01-11T23:52:23.536-05:002013-01-11T23:52:23.536-05:00...I like how you recited it Fred... It adds inten......I like how you recited it Fred... It adds intensity and life to whole cover of the poem... especially the refraining lines with a bit of invertions between word/s - you recited every last line of each stanza in a lowering tone...almost murmuring and it works very effective & appealing to ears... Normally, when i do poetry reading i prefer to be consistent in sounding calm & slow...not initiating tone nor emphasizing word/s so as not to sound like in a declamation or oratorical recital...i prefer mine to be in a plain, deep tone...but of course there could always be an exception...since yours require a much intonation & speed on some lines or group of words... Thanks, i enjoyed it...smiles...kelvin s.m.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08116213800655914273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-22616979978505235122013-01-11T19:55:20.283-05:002013-01-11T19:55:20.283-05:00Some stare in anticipation when predictability is ...Some stare in anticipation when predictability is ever known. Some ignite their todays by the voices of a tomorrow never told. Ever waiting for a second hand,<br /><br />Rightly so! The future can be so mysteriously blanketed one often wonder what follows. The voice and the tone was just perfect, Fred!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-68142533210295352602013-01-11T17:58:39.205-05:002013-01-11T17:58:39.205-05:00I like this the best -- lots to think about here
...I like this the best -- lots to think about here<br /><br />Portent looming undoubtedly draws and expires. Crescendos rise and mergers meld. Confluence is inevitable, only its perception can be swayed; only perception can be swayed.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-73489355152364747822013-01-11T13:39:28.203-05:002013-01-11T13:39:28.203-05:00Your use of repetition in this highlights the whol...Your use of repetition in this highlights the whole feeling of syncopation, rhythm and reflection. Nicely done, Fred.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-83947432806028810902013-01-11T12:44:48.116-05:002013-01-11T12:44:48.116-05:00I like this part best:
Never altering pacing’s cr...I like this part best:<br /><br />Never altering pacing’s creed, each minutia’s never to repeat. Sounding still or pealing high, some build toward elation, others are solely bled to cry, others solely bred to cry.<br /><br />I think its a challenge to capture a moment or scene or a time ~ Enjoyed this Fred ~ Happy weekend ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-78700461489645519772013-01-11T12:11:04.846-05:002013-01-11T12:11:04.846-05:00a second hand to hold..much to ponder in this fred...a second hand to hold..much to ponder in this fred..to me it speaks about finding the own voice, the rhythm carrying..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-21094509415586974782013-01-11T10:55:00.759-05:002013-01-11T10:55:00.759-05:00Tres scholarly... and I really like the repitition...Tres scholarly... and I really like the repitition at the end of each stanza.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-22065430848910458762013-01-11T09:29:18.400-05:002013-01-11T09:29:18.400-05:00Wow, Fred! There is amazing depth to this piece. ...Wow, Fred! There is amazing depth to this piece. I LOVE the ending. :)Rachel Hoythttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12565668664072704971noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-24112523779090009662013-01-11T08:36:10.880-05:002013-01-11T08:36:10.880-05:00Each have their own way of defining such life acts...Each have their own way of defining such life acts and usually go at thier own pace, sometimes no pace at all, but yeah as they say, timing is everything.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-64021942655370784712013-01-11T08:02:00.968-05:002013-01-11T08:02:00.968-05:00I enjoyed your poem, Fred; but especially the last...I enjoyed your poem, Fred; but especially the last stanza. Definitely nothing is ever predictable...and we can never tell about tomorrow. I like the double meaning of 'a second hand.' I think we all would like another hand to hold on to; plus perhaps grab that second hand that keeps moving....in order to just slow down time!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-9123146399845242622013-01-11T07:52:27.782-05:002013-01-11T07:52:27.782-05:00So much to love here. The repetition in the last l...So much to love here. The repetition in the last lines of each stanza works well--I got the feeling of the sameness of each tick of a clock. And of course the last image, the second hand to hold. Very well done!Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10858791213787473858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-9811113877858073382013-01-11T06:35:50.849-05:002013-01-11T06:35:50.849-05:00Some ignite their todays by the voices of a tomorr...Some ignite their todays by the voices of a tomorrow never told. Ever waiting for a second hand, a second hand to hold....this section really jumped out at me fred.....great job on th near repetitions at the end of each stanza as well gives it a haunting quality...cool rhythm to this one as well...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com