tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post6550641366991170443..comments2023-08-29T00:19:57.259-04:00Comments on Poetical Psyche: Fear: ReframedAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-82934584681286899022012-04-21T12:35:14.276-04:002012-04-21T12:35:14.276-04:00This form really imposes a lot of discipline on th...This form really imposes a lot of discipline on the writer, doesn't it? Nevertheless, you worked your way through the framed couplet structure admirably.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-4209756006067200822012-04-21T11:02:26.741-04:002012-04-21T11:02:26.741-04:00Fear does inhibit happiness, even when something j...Fear does inhibit happiness, even when something joyful is acheived, when fear is present it kind of colors things in awful shade and spoils things. Very quickly criticizes, very quickly finds problems to be unhappy about. <br /><br />Awesome rhymes.Ravenblackhttp://theotherdayplace.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-40082836843387125622012-04-20T22:15:46.197-04:002012-04-20T22:15:46.197-04:00The complexitiy of man, always looking for the wea...The complexitiy of man, always looking for the weakness that show so they can point out the lacking to make themselves feel better. Sad but true once more how people have to bring themselves up by putting others down. Nailed the form I will say but that is the norm at your bay.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-31853279791390115672012-04-20T13:22:07.846-04:002012-04-20T13:22:07.846-04:00Hiya Fred,
Words to die for in there. Some I had t...Hiya Fred,<br />Words to die for in there. Some I had to check to make sure they were actually around. My dictionary is doing overtime these days.Janine Bolléehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09857073674960699155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-82922909383322856112012-04-20T13:11:10.854-04:002012-04-20T13:11:10.854-04:00Fascinating form. This makes for a cool out loud r...Fascinating form. This makes for a cool out loud read. I especially liked the second stanza... "defining man solely by his lacks." Nice.Jameshttp://coyotemercury.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-79870212761399617142012-04-20T11:30:54.309-04:002012-04-20T11:30:54.309-04:00Really like this Fred--as always your ambitious vo...Really like this Fred--as always your ambitious vocabulary works totally up to its level, and the rhyme just plays out the words like a Las Vegas croupier. Fear is a dream killer.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-76948036554085112582012-04-20T10:53:49.969-04:002012-04-20T10:53:49.969-04:00WOW! This is good! I LOVE that you wrote about the...WOW! This is good! I LOVE that you wrote about the writing. (Form poems that explore the act of writing always excite me.) So to top off the difficulties of the poem which you met brilliantly you added these wonderful metaphors of physical frailties discussing our psychological resistance to getting our work done. Brilliant!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-2002190521129210792012-04-20T07:58:59.892-04:002012-04-20T07:58:59.892-04:00This really fits the form, a wonderful job filling...This really fits the form, a wonderful job filling it out with the emotion and substance bringing it alive.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-27426415655163519222012-04-20T05:55:13.778-04:002012-04-20T05:55:13.778-04:00wow- you nailed the form- clinically! but sill kep...wow- you nailed the form- clinically! but sill kept a distinct poetic voice<br /><br />Variety and selection, are<br />Varicose to those afraid to start<br />Travails, shielding as not to betray<br />Troubled arteries alone and frayed<br /><br />I loved this- spoek to me about how vulnerable people, anxious people, see change or the escape from routine as a challenge not excitement... and personally- i know this can be very true<br /><br />well penned- enjoyed muchly!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-56626043768612647282012-04-20T00:04:23.525-04:002012-04-20T00:04:23.525-04:00defining man by his lacks...yep that happens and w...defining man by his lacks...yep that happens and we do it to ourselves as well...there is a nice swinging cadence in this as well which makes it pleasing to the ear...will drop back and see if i havent read that previous....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-46247447001089678652012-04-19T23:46:14.638-04:002012-04-19T23:46:14.638-04:00You took an interesting approach to the beginning ...You took an interesting approach to the beginning syllable rhymes. Your subject is terribly sad. The form could almost be seen as a crutch which adds a layer of artistry to your work. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-78532212604699264752012-04-19T22:43:29.876-04:002012-04-19T22:43:29.876-04:00Hi Fred! Inner corruption creeps! A little creep...Hi Fred! Inner corruption creeps! A little creepy (in a good way)! Well done. K.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com