tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post4142253077315241956..comments2023-08-29T00:19:57.259-04:00Comments on Poetical Psyche: GenesisAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-3841456246056465312011-09-21T21:55:46.773-04:002011-09-21T21:55:46.773-04:00Luke, Glad you liked it. Really means a lot. Yea...Luke, Glad you liked it. Really means a lot. Yeah, I know too well about failed poetic/writing experiments. I work in strange ways sometimes, and I do it for fun so It doesn't bother me all that much, but yeah some I read after I'm done and I'm confused lol. But some I think are pretty good and love hearing the feedback either way. But it's definitely pretty sweet when the experiments work out. Again, really glad you enjoyed the piece and thanks for the feedback, I do appreciate it. Thanks againAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-30953111859519016072011-09-21T21:52:49.210-04:002011-09-21T21:52:49.210-04:00Kez, Really glad you enjoyed the write. Thanks fo...Kez, Really glad you enjoyed the write. Thanks for checking it out and for stopping in to say hi. Thanks againAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-10594097315742028942011-09-21T16:40:31.784-04:002011-09-21T16:40:31.784-04:00Experimental is right... and I like it... some poe...Experimental is right... and I like it... some poetry experiments really aren't doing much for me but yours are way out there in a good way. post post post modernist avant gardism hehe. Great stuffLuke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-81967969667812587242011-09-21T16:31:25.869-04:002011-09-21T16:31:25.869-04:00wow all I can say EPIC loved it thank you xwow all I can say EPIC loved it thank you xAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10624767707167052328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-27053750798610034882011-09-21T12:56:48.057-04:002011-09-21T12:56:48.057-04:00Ann, glad you were able to go back and understand ...Ann, glad you were able to go back and understand the piece. I was a bit worried about pushing the confusion and disjointedness a bit too far where all sense of meaning may be lost- Glad the explanations cleared things up for you, really glad I incorporated it now. Thanks again, glad you liked itAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-67610079142314975302011-09-21T12:24:57.066-04:002011-09-21T12:24:57.066-04:00I had a little bit of a hard time with this one th...I had a little bit of a hard time with this one then after reading your explanation went back and read it again then I saw what you were expressing so well done thanks for sharing<br />http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/20/the-fait-of-our-lands/#comment-1018Ann LeFlorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09421100825301270608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-23821377929830623052011-09-21T12:00:06.225-04:002011-09-21T12:00:06.225-04:00Thanks to everyone, all of your feedback is wonder...Thanks to everyone, all of your feedback is wonderful. Really appreciate each part of each of them. It seems like more than a few found the piece a bit discomforting, which I'm happy to hear:)<br /><br />It also seems like Section VII seems to be a favorite as well- I do love the way the heading sounds here, and this piece is the product of all the others, and wraps the piece down.<br /><br />Really thrilled by the feedback, again my deepest thanks, glad so many enjoyed the pieceAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-38850490954976097472011-09-21T08:16:18.314-04:002011-09-21T08:16:18.314-04:00wow Fred! many emotions elicited, the first stanza...wow Fred! many emotions elicited, the first stanza opens with such a raw and powerful sentiment, and from there you expand...I really appreciated the internal sound carving, and the way the unfamiliar words slipped into and around my mind, which happened because you used them so well...thank you for the journey..and the ending 'Blood still red. Like your own, is your own'Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-25491009690296774982011-09-21T02:00:52.695-04:002011-09-21T02:00:52.695-04:00VII was my favorite, or perhaps by then I was used...VII was my favorite, or perhaps by then I was used to words like rot, clot and bloat.Randy Behaviorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17221025801740967490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-77098467358588257242011-09-21T00:20:35.632-04:002011-09-21T00:20:35.632-04:00all of your intents were met with this reader! ve...all of your intents were met with this reader! very mind-spinning write, FredSheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-28227136814496431462011-09-20T23:38:41.653-04:002011-09-20T23:38:41.653-04:00After reading your explanation I can certainly see...After reading your explanation I can certainly see everything you set about to express here. In part VI. the part about a rearranged point of view and shedding skins really stuck with me. I have a feeling once I go back, I'll find many more lines that pop out, but these are my first thoughts, and I thank you for sharing yours :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01547380098561803645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-338624737461147572011-09-20T22:38:00.729-04:002011-09-20T22:38:00.729-04:00You picked some horrific maladies there, and some ...You picked some horrific maladies there, and some of the words combinations really grabbed me and forced me to pay closer attention (I appreciate that). Necrotic is one of my favorite words (there's a story there but it's not very interesting). As someone who used to work in healthcare risk management I felt that same sense of dread when opening unusual occurrence reports (UORs like acronyms could protect us from liability). Marvelous use of language mixed in with disorientation (as you indicated was intentional). I think this is how we make art by imbuing work with the totality of experience and thought not just the refined processes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-35457754438755666522011-09-20T22:15:15.387-04:002011-09-20T22:15:15.387-04:00You probe the weaknesses(and strengths) or our phy...You probe the weaknesses(and strengths) or our physical beings, and induce a fair share of disguts, but also shared insight. Your first stanza made me think of the state of our polity, as well, becoming the wounds of this deadly time. This piece accelerates from a collection of stark statements to a metaphysical shadowbox of ideas--well-written, and just a tad on the effectively gruesome side. Liked it much.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-36962698808774405792011-09-20T21:54:43.282-04:002011-09-20T21:54:43.282-04:00I never thought of getting inspiration from there....I never thought of getting inspiration from there. I admire your carefully chosen words here, knowing the time and care you gave it. I like the first and last verses though...made me think out of the box.<br /><br />Happy OLN ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-49136886439676652602011-09-20T21:27:08.236-04:002011-09-20T21:27:08.236-04:00A nice and creative write.A nice and creative write.ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-41999598872879308812011-09-20T21:20:34.668-04:002011-09-20T21:20:34.668-04:00Wow this is so deep on many levels and from so man...Wow this is so deep on many levels and from so many different angles too. It has pain of self and others, understanding of the life cycle from sex/lovemaking, conception, life, from birth to death. It is quite a master piece of a work of Art Fred shows great inner growth of the writer (you) <br />Intricate and lovely.Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-24807994169801294212011-09-20T21:09:31.175-04:002011-09-20T21:09:31.175-04:00bro...This is sick. I really liked this. You hav...bro...This is sick. I really liked this. You have such range and you always take the time to ensure to go full tilt when putting down words....I really like a blog known as Prophetic Introspection. Its in my links...You will dig that poetry...Its Raw, and unique as hell. Definitely give it a look. Great Job Man.TheLargeYardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06573119402023840691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-84833426202741931532011-09-20T20:59:45.041-04:002011-09-20T20:59:45.041-04:00an ocean of deep blast marvels - i swam in this ba...an ocean of deep blast marvels - i swam in this baby for a while -wildly imaginative fearless and strong because of your bravery to express your self as you want - i recognise your character and this is an essential part of the experience - nice work FredArron Shillinghttp://tom-eliot.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-49725585772196048332011-09-20T20:29:53.567-04:002011-09-20T20:29:53.567-04:00Powerful images and thoughts, Fred. The 7th sectio...Powerful images and thoughts, Fred. The 7th section is sticking with me. Keep it rocking.Joseph Heschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13217169295029029233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-58256051986003429202011-09-20T19:45:38.923-04:002011-09-20T19:45:38.923-04:00Pat, Confuse the cat, no, nyet to that. Yeah medi...Pat, Confuse the cat, no, nyet to that. Yeah medical terms can be a bit off-putting, for their sounds and for the mainly negative connotations they represent. But I've grown to appreciate all types of words and sometimes I just like to blindly sift through the pages of "other worlds," never knowing when an inspiration may rear it's pretty head.<br /><br />The titles came about after I was nearly through with the write. They were included within various verses, and thought they were both Eye Catching and Foreign for most, so thought I'd use the headlines. Crappy surgeons are the worst, as they chalk it up to a bad day, pay the increase to their malpractice fees while the patient's life is left at unease- Sloppy is bad, well sometimes, glad to see, that in this way I didn't shine. Curling the nose was an intended goal, glad you enjoyed the piece- thanks againAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-22397806972119385452011-09-20T19:39:54.935-04:002011-09-20T19:39:54.935-04:00Brian, thanks man, appreciate the words. Becoming...Brian, thanks man, appreciate the words. Becoming our wounds is something I think of all too much these days- I guess, in a way, I wanted to draw some attention in that regards, not so much as to my particular case, but how before someone has an injury or a problem medically life my seem rosy, or at the very least, and was the case for me, you simply phase ills away, ignoring what does not play a role in your life-and then thunder strikes and you're eyes grow all too wide awake- I have to say I wasn't very understanding or empathetic to "strange" things, but since awareness and empathy is through the roof. Guess that's a positive I can take. Glad you enjoyed the piece and seems like some of the intended discomfort came through- thanks as always-Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-49004593336995249832011-09-20T12:48:40.638-04:002011-09-20T12:48:40.638-04:00You will never confuse me, but disgust my ocd. Eww...You will never confuse me, but disgust my ocd. Ewww medical terms, oh the germs. I can't take it any more, close the door on this medical tour..haha<br /><br />Very creative indeed, the titles were really eye catching too. Sure was a bit choppy, but not sloppy, unless you get a crappy surgeon, then that could be bad and you could be a scrotumless lad..haha...enjoyed it, but curled my nose up too.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-930188128946500869.post-26830617029788765752011-09-20T12:34:27.002-04:002011-09-20T12:34:27.002-04:00dude, nicely spun...becoming our wounds in the fir...dude, nicely spun...becoming our wounds in the first makes a great metaphor for the lives of many...some of these are painful to read...particularly number IV...vivid and intense in your imagery throughout...see you in a bit!Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com